I thought this was okay for what it was, I did enjoy it and I did NOT expect that ending as i thought i was going to go missing haha. This was short and it was an interesting experience and I did get hooked.
However, it took me a little while to find the actual shop at the start & also I could not hear what that news report was saying, and when leaving and that NPC stops you, its pitch black and I couldn't see who was talking to me.
Other than that, this was not too bad for what it was! Great job, I look forward to more!